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Last time Hector watched (helplessly) as the madam hit Simon in the face and demanded to know what he had done to 'the girl'...
“I only tried to - ”
Before Simon could finish, she slapped him again.
Hector pushed his face into Simon’s back and squeezed his eyes shut, but he couldn’t escape the sound of the blow or the shuddering recoil of his brother’s body.
There was silence, and when Hector emerged, the madam was staring down at him, her rouged lips curled in bloody disgust. Across her left canine was a vivid curl of red stain and the flash of red on white was momentarily beautiful against her dark hair and golden skin.
“The two of you are useless,” the madam snarled, and the beauty was gone.
OMG! Is she a vampire? Love it!ReplyDelete
The madam sounds like my kind of character... LOVE IT!ReplyDelete
Hmmm, the blood on the the canine...sounds like a vampire. I guess she's really ticked off, eh? Nice 6.ReplyDelete
Nicely paced scene and as they say - living the moments. I like.ReplyDelete
Whew...great visuals...felt like I was there watching. Nice 6 :)ReplyDelete
You used colour to good advantage here. I see why some readers thought "vampire" - loved the line - and the beauty was gone.ReplyDelete
Wow, she's one scary bitch.ReplyDelete
Ouch. Mystery deepening!ReplyDelete
this is such an intriguing story. I want more!ReplyDelete
Definitely different from the last time I read this. You really feel this with Hector.ReplyDelete
She's one tough customer. Great visual with the red stained canine tooth.ReplyDelete
More mystery. Love itReplyDelete
I LOVE this! Beautiful writing.ReplyDelete
Makes me more and more curious about the world.ReplyDelete
I like the mysteriousness here. It makes e curious about what comes next! Great six!ReplyDelete
I love the oposites -- beauty and then it was gone. A powerful six.ReplyDelete
Very well done. I'll have to go back and check out the previous six.ReplyDelete
Such a great juxtaposition--the beauty of the red and the horribleness of the woman. Great six!ReplyDelete
Gotta love a dominant female. But I wonder about these males, are they really as submissive as they seem? :)ReplyDelete
Hector is definitely a different individual. And the madam has tales to tell and not pleasant ones. But what about the girl? Love this six. Great description!ReplyDelete
Some great personalities peeking through here. Thanks for sharing!ReplyDelete
Great visual and emotions. I don't like her and pity them.ReplyDelete
Vivid curl of red on her canine. Nice. Good use of color here.ReplyDelete
Wow, very powerful. Great 6.ReplyDelete
Very powerful :) Excited for next Sunday's addition!ReplyDelete
Loved the action. The choreography of characters written brilliantly!ReplyDelete
Wonderful villainess! You brought the scene to vivid life with your description. Well done!ReplyDelete
'...vivid curl of red stain ...'<<Love it! Nice 6. :o)ReplyDelete
Something tells me the madam might not be human ... which leaves me wondering about the other two, also. Nicely done! :o)ReplyDelete
The whole thing is wonderful, but I particularly liked "momentarily beautiful" - impactful, that!ReplyDelete
Tense scene. That madam is one scary lady! Great six...ReplyDelete
Congratulations on the agent opportunity! Intriguing situation--more conflict and more questions!ReplyDelete