Another fine, summer weekend, another Six Sentence Sunday to enjoy! I know I can't wait to read them all... how about you?
Thanks to everyone who visits each week, and especially those who leave comments :) You totally make my day :)
Last time I introduced you to Simon and Faith, so now you get a bit of (one-sided) dialogue. By the way, just like a few of you commented that Simon doesn't seem like a servant, Faith also *isn't* a princess... he just calls her that.
“Good morning, little princess.”
Though his words and the rattle of the glass door had broken the silence, Faith did not turn, make a noise or even twitch to suggest she was aware of his presence. It was as if she was shut off completely in her own little world.
With cautious steps, Simon crossed the small room and placed a tray by Faith’s side, his breath loud in his ears against the soft clink and clatter of breakfast dishes. The smell of fish broth and salted butter made his mouth water as he stirred a spoonful of precious honey and goat milk into her tea.
“Are you hungry, little princess? It’s your favorite, baked clams.”
Her long black eyelashes were in profile, so still they seemed decorative, like the fine wire jewelry worn by the artisans and factory owners of the glass city.
Very descriptive and well written. Great 6!
ReplyDeleteVery descriptive. Clams in the morning? Ewww.
ReplyDeleteGreat descriptive snippet, but all that food is making me hungry, lol!
ReplyDeleteAbsolutely beautiful words. Your description is poetry in motion.
ReplyDeleteI love your world-building in this story. :)
ReplyDeleteI love his view of her, great set up.
ReplyDeleteIntriguing six. Is she being held captive? Interesting twist from last week when he did appear to be a servant.
ReplyDeleteI just love this - the use of the word "precious" gives a clue too. I just want to read and read
ReplyDeleteThis story is really getting me intrigued
ReplyDeleteNicely done. I'd like to spend more time inside that world.
ReplyDeleteI love the descriptive simile in the last line. Perfect!
ReplyDeleteNice, very intriguing. Something is definitely going on between them. Can't wait to find out what it is.
ReplyDeleteTerrific snippet with a marvelous description of her eyelashes.
ReplyDeleteNice.
ReplyDeleteYou use description very well.
ReplyDeleteVivid and wonderfully detailed description. Love 'glass city' -- that's so intriguing!
ReplyDeleteYuppers, she eats clams in the morning :) They live on the edge of a desert wasteland, so ALL their food comes from the ocean, or is imported on caravans (the precious honey).
ReplyDeleteThank you, everyone for your comments!
We're seeing Faith through Simon's eyes. Between this week and last, what he sees is beautiful. I suspect something deeper is going on.
ReplyDeleteThe last line was particularly intriguing. I'm curious about the glass city.
ReplyDelete@ Devin:
ReplyDelete...what he sees may be beautiful to the reader, but there's a reason he automatically did a ward against drowning the moment he laid eyes on her...
Thank you everyone else for your comments!
Wonderful tension in this lyrical description. Great six.
ReplyDeleteI haven't read the earlier bits; just this one. I'm impressed, really and truly. I *want* to put that much poetry in my prose, but I can't usually manage it.
ReplyDeleteIntriguing characterization, too!
Also, you've given me an idea for a *completely* different story to pull from for my next Six Sentence Sunday.
Loved the description of her eyelashes. :)
ReplyDeleteGreat descriptions, especially of her eyelashes! You have a new fan! :)
ReplyDeleteThanks for dropping by my blog! To answer your questions, the blindfolded fight scene was nothing more than a training session, so the strikes were controlled. There wouldn't be blood as by 'blade' I meant the blade of the hand, the part of the hand used in karate chops! Most of the scene came out in bits and chunks over the last few weeks for SSS, so if you're interested you can find them on my blog! :)
@ Robert C Roman:
ReplyDeleteThat's awesome!! Come back and tell me about it!
@JC Martin:
Ah, thanks for clearing that up ;) I know nothing about martial arts, except for what I have seen in movies... which is about as realistic as Hollywood gun fights (which I know, 'cause I can shoot a gun properly ;p)
There seems to be an air of sadness, as his princess doesn't seem to respond. Very beautifully written...
ReplyDeleteKathleen Grieve
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