Well, it's the first SSS of October, the air is crisp and the brightly coloured maple leaves are crackling and crunching under my feet whenever I take the dog for a walk. This truly is my favourite month of the year :)
So last time, Hector was cowering at Simon's back, afraid yet mesmerized by the madam...
She moved closer and Simon bent his knees until his head was lower than the madam’s and his eyes were politely lowered despite the handprint on his cheek. Hector could only stare at the mark on Simon’s face, his own body refusing to bend, to submit under the madam’s stare, but she didn’t look at him. Instead, her chin lifted and Simon’s back rounded into a hunch, his shoulders curling inward as though trying to fold away the swiftly growing limbs of his fifteen year old body.
The madam’s gaze clawed over Simon, pausing at his downcast eyes and crouched posture, then she sneered and stepped away. “You’ve been here almost a week and she’s still roaring away up there like some kinda animal. You’re lucky there’s no customers at this time of day. Business is already falling ‘cause of her fits.”
I am more intrigued with each snippet. As always, wonderful description. You have me hooked!
ReplyDeleteVery curious to see where this is going. The mom in me wants to pop that madam in the eye, though. :P
ReplyDeleteIntriguing six!
ReplyDeleteOh, poor Simon. I want to read more.
ReplyDeleteCuriouser and curiouser with each six. And I always want to know more. Great mystery as to what the hell's going on here. Wonderful six!
ReplyDeleteInteresting, but why is it his fault? And someone needs to smack the madam.
ReplyDeleteVery evocative writing! I'll need to check out what happens next week.
ReplyDeleteThis is an intriguing snippet, really enjoyed it!
ReplyDeleteI really love this description. Very vivid. I feel so sorry for these two. Definitely makes me want to keep reading. Excellent six.
ReplyDeleteThat's it? Really? Is there a secret website where I can read more?
ReplyDeleteGreat six! (sorry it took so long to return the commenting favor)
Yikes! The tension is mounting even more and I keep wondering where this is going and what's up with the girl in the room. Great job!
ReplyDeleteI really, really don't like that woman. Great six!
ReplyDeleteNot sure what's going on but it certainly is intriguing.
ReplyDeleteSuch an intriguing world you're building. Terrific emotional war going on inside all of these characters.
ReplyDeleteHum, intrigued even more now
ReplyDeleteSo easy to "see" this - great six! (And I love fall, so I loved the intro, too!)
ReplyDeleteThis was my first week, so I had to go back and read from the beginning. I'm totally hooked.
ReplyDeleteFinally got caught up! This story is getting curiouser and curiouser... I can't wait for next week!
ReplyDeleteLike the attitude of submission from Simon. And that little spark of defiance from Hector.
ReplyDeleteInteresting character dynamic going on here.
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ReplyDeleteCurious to see where this is going.
ReplyDeleteGreat six
ReplyDeleteOkay, now I need to now more! Great six!
ReplyDeleteJust as intriguing as last Sunday's! Love the characterization.
ReplyDeleteBeautifully written! Sensational six.
ReplyDeleteThe lower and lowered so close together bumped me a bit but otherwise I loved the description of his posture!! Very vivid!
ReplyDeleteOK, now you've really lost me... will have to come back to understand what the hell is going on! ;-)
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Strong six. Well done.
ReplyDeleteI forgot to do this again! Oh well, maybe next Sunday.
ReplyDeleteWonderful imagery. Wonder what their being there has anything to do with her fits, whoever she is.
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