Sunday, October 2, 2011

Six Sentence Sunday 16

Six Sentence Sunday sixteen...wow, try and say that five time fast...

Well, it's the first SSS of October, the air is crisp and the brightly coloured maple leaves are crackling and crunching under my feet whenever I take the dog for a walk. This truly is my favourite month of the year :)

So last time, Hector was cowering at Simon's back, afraid yet mesmerized by the madam...


She moved closer and Simon bent his knees until his head was lower than the madam’s and his eyes were politely lowered despite the handprint on his cheek. Hector could only stare at the mark on Simon’s face, his own body refusing to bend, to submit under the madam’s stare, but she didn’t look at him. Instead, her chin lifted and Simon’s back rounded into a hunch, his shoulders curling inward as though trying to fold away the swiftly growing limbs of his fifteen year old body.
The madam’s gaze clawed over Simon, pausing at his downcast eyes and crouched posture, then she sneered and stepped away. “You’ve been here almost a week and she’s still roaring away up there like some kinda animal. You’re lucky there’s no customers at this time of day. Business is already falling ‘cause of her fits.”

31 comments:

  1. I am more intrigued with each snippet. As always, wonderful description. You have me hooked!

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  2. Very curious to see where this is going. The mom in me wants to pop that madam in the eye, though. :P

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  3. Oh, poor Simon. I want to read more.

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  4. Curiouser and curiouser with each six. And I always want to know more. Great mystery as to what the hell's going on here. Wonderful six!

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  5. Interesting, but why is it his fault? And someone needs to smack the madam.

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  6. Very evocative writing! I'll need to check out what happens next week.

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  7. This is an intriguing snippet, really enjoyed it!

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  8. I really love this description. Very vivid. I feel so sorry for these two. Definitely makes me want to keep reading. Excellent six.

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  9. That's it? Really? Is there a secret website where I can read more?

    Great six! (sorry it took so long to return the commenting favor)

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  10. Yikes! The tension is mounting even more and I keep wondering where this is going and what's up with the girl in the room. Great job!

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  11. I really, really don't like that woman. Great six!

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  12. Not sure what's going on but it certainly is intriguing.

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  13. Such an intriguing world you're building. Terrific emotional war going on inside all of these characters.

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  14. So easy to "see" this - great six! (And I love fall, so I loved the intro, too!)

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  15. This was my first week, so I had to go back and read from the beginning. I'm totally hooked.

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  16. Finally got caught up! This story is getting curiouser and curiouser... I can't wait for next week!

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  17. Like the attitude of submission from Simon. And that little spark of defiance from Hector.

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  18. Interesting character dynamic going on here.

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  19. Okay, now I need to now more! Great six!

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  20. Just as intriguing as last Sunday's! Love the characterization.

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  21. Beautifully written! Sensational six.

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  22. The lower and lowered so close together bumped me a bit but otherwise I loved the description of his posture!! Very vivid!

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  23. OK, now you've really lost me... will have to come back to understand what the hell is going on! ;-)
    Barb

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  24. I forgot to do this again! Oh well, maybe next Sunday.

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  25. Wonderful imagery. Wonder what their being there has anything to do with her fits, whoever she is.

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