Fascinating work you have here. I like the voice of the narrator and the sexual tension moves well with what's going on in the scene. It feels like a wanton violation on some levels yet a welcome relief in others.
Great stuff, Monkey! Really... I want to read on and find out where you're going with this. Small typo I noticed waaaaay up at the beginning: "friends" is missing its apostrophe :) Please write more, quickly!
Fascinating work you have here. I like the voice of the narrator and the sexual tension moves well with what's going on in the scene. It feels like a wanton violation on some levels yet a welcome relief in others.
ReplyDelete@ Michael
ReplyDelete...I'm not sure if that was as compliment or a suggestion I seek psychological help...
I'm really enjoying this. I love the way the characters are developing.
ReplyDeleteGreat stuff, Monkey! Really... I want to read on and find out where you're going with this. Small typo I noticed waaaaay up at the beginning: "friends" is missing its apostrophe :) Please write more, quickly!
ReplyDelete@ Sarah
ReplyDeleteThanks :) ...though I know I have to re-write that final para here since I don't think the meaning is entirely clear... ah well, first drafts :p
@ Guilie
Thank you so much for pointing that out!