Sunday, September 25, 2011

Six Sentence Sunday 15

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Last time Hector watched (helplessly) as the madam hit Simon in the face and demanded to know what he had done to 'the girl'...


“I only tried to - ”
Before Simon could finish, she slapped him again.
Hector pushed his face into Simon’s back and squeezed his eyes shut, but he couldn’t escape the sound of the blow or the shuddering recoil of his brother’s body.
There was silence, and when Hector emerged, the madam was staring down at him, her rouged lips curled in bloody disgust. Across her left canine was a vivid curl of red stain and the flash of red on white was momentarily beautiful against her dark hair and golden skin.
“The two of you are useless,” the madam snarled, and the beauty was gone.

34 comments:

  1. The madam sounds like my kind of character... LOVE IT!

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  2. Hmmm, the blood on the the canine...sounds like a vampire. I guess she's really ticked off, eh? Nice 6.

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  3. Nicely paced scene and as they say - living the moments. I like.

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  4. Whew...great visuals...felt like I was there watching. Nice 6 :)

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  5. You used colour to good advantage here. I see why some readers thought "vampire" - loved the line - and the beauty was gone.

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  6. this is such an intriguing story. I want more!

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  7. Definitely different from the last time I read this. You really feel this with Hector.

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  8. She's one tough customer. Great visual with the red stained canine tooth.

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  9. Makes me more and more curious about the world.

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  10. I like the mysteriousness here. It makes e curious about what comes next! Great six!

    Amy Durham

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  11. I love the oposites -- beauty and then it was gone. A powerful six.

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  12. Very well done. I'll have to go back and check out the previous six.

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  13. Such a great juxtaposition--the beauty of the red and the horribleness of the woman. Great six!

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  14. Gotta love a dominant female. But I wonder about these males, are they really as submissive as they seem? :)

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  15. Hector is definitely a different individual. And the madam has tales to tell and not pleasant ones. But what about the girl? Love this six. Great description!

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  16. Some great personalities peeking through here. Thanks for sharing!

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  17. Great visual and emotions. I don't like her and pity them.

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  18. Vivid curl of red on her canine. Nice. Good use of color here.

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  19. Very powerful :) Excited for next Sunday's addition!

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  20. Loved the action. The choreography of characters written brilliantly!

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  21. Wonderful villainess! You brought the scene to vivid life with your description. Well done!

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  22. '...vivid curl of red stain ...'<<Love it! Nice 6. :o)

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  23. Something tells me the madam might not be human ... which leaves me wondering about the other two, also. Nicely done! :o)

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  24. The whole thing is wonderful, but I particularly liked "momentarily beautiful" - impactful, that!

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  25. Tense scene. That madam is one scary lady! Great six...

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  26. Congratulations on the agent opportunity! Intriguing situation--more conflict and more questions!

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