Sunday, August 21, 2011

Six Sentence Sunday 10

I finally made it to 10!! ...despite the 2 week hiatus...

Welcome back all you SSS participants! I'm excited to go back and catch up on what I missed. If you've been following along, I've been building tension... but since it's been a while, you might want a link reminder of what happened last time (or check out the SSS tab at the top of the page to read from the beginning), this next selection is where things start to blow up in Simon's face:


As his fingers touched a loose curl, Faith whirled around, her hands clenched as she beat him away.
“No!”
It was more of a shriek than a word and in an instant the breakfast tray had been flipped by her flailing limbs. Clams, broth, tea and broken dishes were everywhere and her voice was rising higher and louder until it was simply an ear-splitting wail.
“I’m sorry! I’m sorry, little princess!”

16 comments:

  1. me first?
    clams for breakfast? you're the second one I read who mentioned clams - now I'm hungry I love clams!

    Anyway great scene - he didn't know yet she is not to be touched?

    excellent six

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  2. I wonder how long before he tries to touch her again? :)

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  3. Poor Simon. I guess that is one way to learn your lesson.

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  4. Everything about this situation smacks of tragedy and makes me cringe. (Which is a good thing, FYI.)

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  5. Hmm, a strong reaction, is it to him or breakfast? Nice six!

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  6. Poor girl. She is so distraught.

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  7. Clams for breakfast? I'd DIE! LOL. But on a serious note, her distress is quite clear. Nice job!

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  8. Since others already mentioned clams for breakfast... :)
    Love your descriptions, as always, esp. "more of a shriek than a word" - so evocative. Good work.

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  9. Why is she afraid of his touch? It seems innocent enough, no harm intended. Poor Simon and Faith.

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  10. LOL fun clip, and love your descriptions! Nice showing xx

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  11. Wow! The tension is boiling at this point. Great six!

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  12. She sounds like a difficult charge, no wonder he hesitated to touch her. I'm curious to find out how he can win her trust. (For feral kittens, baby food in very small steps toward closeness has worked for me, but this one's already rejected the clams...LOL.) Suspenseful six!

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  13. He backpedaled quick enough. I wonder how he plans to earn her trust?

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  14. I just jumped over here after seeing your moniker (which is very cool) when you commented on my SSS (thank you very much), and wow! this is good and meaty writing, and now I've got to catch up on your SSS's! Well done.

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  15. This is fabulous. The scene jumps to life. Great descriptions!!!

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Type me out a line of Shakespeare or a line of nonsense. Dumb-blonde-jokes & Irish jokes will make me laugh myself silly :)