Sunday, May 29, 2011

Six Sentence Sunday

If you haven't heard of it, here's the link.

It seems to be mostly romance writers, or maybe I just had bad luck when clicking on random people's links :)

Since I didn't mean to offend anyone, what I meant was I wasn't sure if this was something open only to Romance writers and I was unknowingly barging in 'cause I thought it was such a cool idea.

Mine is decidedly not romance.

This is taken from Project #3 which is fresh, un-shiny, first draft writing. Basically it's my *relief* project that I pick away at when I want to take a break from editing Project #2. The main character is in grade 6 and it's my first time writing first-person, present tense, and my first time writing MG (so be brutal, but also be kind).

Here's my selection:

Mom sighs and stands up. She takes my plate and hers to the counter, then climbs the stairs to the second floor. She never cried in front of me, not even in the hospital when they were stitching up my head and Kaitlin was in the morgue with a sheet over her face. I never actually saw Kaitlin, but they show dead people like that on tv and I see her like that when I'm trying to fall asleep at night. I hear mom’s door squeak shut and know that she won’t come down until her tears are gone and her eyes are no longer red.
Mom never wants to share her pain with others. Not even dad.


  1. It's always more wrenching when the characters are being brave and not crying all over the page.

    Welcome to sss.

  2. What you have written in the first person is very effective.

  3. Good voice - your character sounds like a sixth grader. Also good way to reveal back story - short but full of info.
    Here are my six: Sandy's Six

  4. This is so well written, with a great voice and such wrenching emotions on display, that I forgive you your "bad luck" at reading romance crack and welcome you to Six Sentence Sunday, anyway.

  5. Hahahaha... sorry, didn't mean to offend anyone with the comment about "bad luck" :)

    I was more meaning that I wasn't sure if I was *allowed* to participate if this was just a thing for Romance writers... although, after reading almost every other entry today, I did find a few others that didn't seem to be Romance novels, so I think I'm okay?

    I just didn't want to jump in if it's a genre-exclusive thing :)

  6. That's a sad, gut wrenching six. Thanks for sharing

  7. Wow, sad snippet but excellently written.

    (I'm a non-romance writer too, so you're not alone, lol)

  8. This is good. It feels very real, excellent voice. Welcome to Six Sentence Sunday!


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