If anyone hasn't heard of the site, Miss Snark's First Victim, she sometimes hosts contests and critiques. It's a fun site.
So right now, she's hosting another edition of 'What's Broken?', and I managed to weasel my way into being a participant.
Mine is #5.
Feel free to comment! I have NO IDEA if my description in this passage works or not... essentially, what Hector and Simon are looking at is an old overgrown garden (they have never seen plants before) with a stone tower being slowly devoured by vines/etc.