Kell is pretty clear in my mind, but Jay's still a mystery.
Comments/criticisms always welcome :) It's freshly written, so I'm sure it's packed full of mistakes, though I know I did throw in one made-up word... can you find it? ...and I know the tenses are a little messed up... started in past, switched to present, and don't think I caught all the necessary fixes.
EDIT: I added a little more, and now (for sure) I know this'll lean closer to the magical realism end of things. Somehow these characters merged with a story idea that's been skulking around in the back of my head for years.
I *get* Jay now. Like, 100% get him.
...and I hope he creeps you out, just a little ;)
I love your writing. This has enough darkness to it that I long for more.
ReplyDelete..seems to be what I gravitate too...
Deletethank you :)
can't find the made up word.
ReplyDeleteI looked again - I copied it into word
ReplyDeleteenslimed is the word and a good one it is
heh, I just couldn't help it... it sounded too good not to use :D
Deleteit is too good not to use. Someone just told me you had snow. I said that Kristen hadn't mentioned it. She doesn't talk about such mundane stuff. I shouldn't have said that part out loud to the person I was speaking to. Horrid rain here going out right away
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