tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3499819998811995494.post1335298321893607138..comments2024-03-08T05:27:56.968-08:00Comments on 1000th.monkey: I use a mac, not a typewriter: Six Sentence Sunday 81000th.monkeyhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/16835988128285459745noreply@blogger.comBlogger45125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3499819998811995494.post-64350474156208929152011-07-26T14:58:52.548-07:002011-07-26T14:58:52.548-07:00Ohh, I'm curious about Hector. Nice writing.Ohh, I'm curious about Hector. Nice writing.Jennifer Wilckhttp://www.jenniferwilck.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3499819998811995494.post-45282948418752699372011-07-25T11:30:26.835-07:002011-07-25T11:30:26.835-07:00Nice building of tension here, well done! :)Nice building of tension here, well done! :)Lucy Felthousehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02164383675268417252noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3499819998811995494.post-41238917797251133042011-07-25T11:29:42.804-07:002011-07-25T11:29:42.804-07:00Ooo I like your six! :) Hector feels distant. Why?...Ooo I like your six! :) Hector feels distant. Why? Hmm...Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3499819998811995494.post-57713698247786624912011-07-25T07:05:10.489-07:002011-07-25T07:05:10.489-07:00Hmmm, curiouser and curiouser.Hmmm, curiouser and curiouser.Pippa Jayhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15146591827060731958noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3499819998811995494.post-9301409374122772012011-07-25T02:11:02.391-07:002011-07-25T02:11:02.391-07:00Loved the imagery of the river interspersed with t...Loved the imagery of the river interspersed with the dynamics between these characters. Keeps one guessing! NICE!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02422942404526720212noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3499819998811995494.post-60532512470283724002011-07-24T20:07:56.640-07:002011-07-24T20:07:56.640-07:00Will Hector become a rival? And who is Faith to th...Will Hector become a rival? And who is Faith to the brothers? Intriguing, well written six!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3499819998811995494.post-27039015433921134182011-07-24T19:17:16.092-07:002011-07-24T19:17:16.092-07:00More questions and undercurrents of tension and su...More questions and undercurrents of tension and suspense pulling us deeper into the story. Intriguing six!Lynne Murrayhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12549765142750458479noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3499819998811995494.post-90052480998680268602011-07-24T15:38:39.005-07:002011-07-24T15:38:39.005-07:00Love the dynamic you seem to be setting up between...Love the dynamic you seem to be setting up between these characters. Intriguing.Laura Kayehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06405372483109781087noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3499819998811995494.post-46636714495656590872011-07-24T15:37:28.669-07:002011-07-24T15:37:28.669-07:00Excellent, as always. I'm intrigued to know mo...Excellent, as always. I'm intrigued to know more about Hector.Verna Clayhttp://www.vernaclay.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3499819998811995494.post-8336435142055215402011-07-24T15:32:48.023-07:002011-07-24T15:32:48.023-07:00Beautifully written with a great use of the descri...Beautifully written with a great use of the description.Alixhttp://romancingalix.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3499819998811995494.post-40400486721439255342011-07-24T15:06:02.146-07:002011-07-24T15:06:02.146-07:00Hmm, interesting.Hmm, interesting.Devinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06611169799840685267noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3499819998811995494.post-17190949333925840622011-07-24T14:47:25.223-07:002011-07-24T14:47:25.223-07:00That last line is very intriguing. Definitely make...That last line is very intriguing. Definitely makes the reader want to know more!Sonyahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01351929216915547602noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3499819998811995494.post-15042497876120673822011-07-24T14:07:42.750-07:002011-07-24T14:07:42.750-07:00Intriguing six! Definitely could sense tension bet...Intriguing six! Definitely could sense tension between all the characters.Lorien Velezhttp://lorienvelez.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3499819998811995494.post-14945332912770848502011-07-24T13:46:01.069-07:002011-07-24T13:46:01.069-07:00I've not visited this site before, so I'm ...I've not visited this site before, so I'm a bit lost. Don't know the significance of the glass house. But Hector not speaking to Faith forbodes something not right and makes me want to find out what and why. Great six.Jennahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10308158251486924808noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3499819998811995494.post-75926284534241488812011-07-24T13:31:40.971-07:002011-07-24T13:31:40.971-07:00Lot's of implied intrigue in these six. Great ...Lot's of implied intrigue in these six. Great job!Gem Sivadhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01233835029255570402noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3499819998811995494.post-73632416324547230692011-07-24T13:24:12.303-07:002011-07-24T13:24:12.303-07:00I want to know what Hector's going to do!I want to know what Hector's going to do!Cassandra Carrhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11261191490396335404noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3499819998811995494.post-64342990890399028532011-07-24T13:23:25.981-07:002011-07-24T13:23:25.981-07:00Good description of the scene, and I like how you ...Good description of the scene, and I like how you introduced the character. The only change I'd make (and it's nitpicky)would be to remove "what she was focused on" from this sentence (because it seems redundant): Simon glanced at Faith, trying to gauge by the angle of her head what exactly she was looking at, but with her blank expression it was impossible to tell what she was Sandra Nachlingerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16906884446237370105noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3499819998811995494.post-29321090445740021682011-07-24T13:20:32.908-07:002011-07-24T13:20:32.908-07:00So what's going on between Hector and Faith? H...So what's going on between Hector and Faith? Hmmm...D Carneyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06453390999707087274noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3499819998811995494.post-44971058525519028992011-07-24T13:05:53.089-07:002011-07-24T13:05:53.089-07:00Lot of character relationships being laid out very...Lot of character relationships being laid out very succinctly. Interesting!J.A. Beardhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13866515198865656164noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3499819998811995494.post-49853089413569931972011-07-24T13:02:19.070-07:002011-07-24T13:02:19.070-07:00Dying to know exactly what lies at the center of H...Dying to know exactly what lies at the center of Hector and Faith's tension…Meg Maguirehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15518696543148231758noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3499819998811995494.post-36068860407857255122011-07-24T13:01:37.276-07:002011-07-24T13:01:37.276-07:00I definitely want to know more about Hector. Why h...I definitely want to know more about Hector. Why hasn't he spoken to Faith? Great six!Sarah Grimmhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03737049126767567901noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3499819998811995494.post-55996719262624376582011-07-24T12:59:41.121-07:002011-07-24T12:59:41.121-07:00Great six! What an intriguing story!Great six! What an intriguing story!Lauri J Owenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11915434024514573480noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3499819998811995494.post-39554324981574471542011-07-24T12:46:34.527-07:002011-07-24T12:46:34.527-07:00You asked for critiquing comments, but if it ain&#...You asked for critiquing comments, but if it ain't broke, don't fix it! One thing I might suggest is to leave out the "rough, brown" unless that description is somehow needed for the plot. Honestly, that's all I can come up with.Sondrahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05546034231903326795noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3499819998811995494.post-39562826291829255182011-07-24T12:46:23.721-07:002011-07-24T12:46:23.721-07:00last line tells something's afoot...
Great six...last line tells something's afoot...<br />Great six, thank you!<br />BarbAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3499819998811995494.post-28727534245718485692011-07-24T12:32:40.629-07:002011-07-24T12:32:40.629-07:00My only constructive criticism would be to lose a ...My only constructive criticism would be to lose a "was" or two to make it stronger, though it's plenty strong as is. Hector's an intriguing character. His very silence makes me want to know more, and that they've only been in the glass house for five days - why were they chosen? More, more more...Cate Mastershttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01371792447604980848noreply@blogger.com